MY MYTH
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26/10/16
Today I’m gonna write about how there’s waves at the BLOOMIN’ BEACH SOAKING MY TROUSERS AND LEGS + MY SHOES WHEN I GO TO THE BEACH..
One day a God called Munky (No I can’t spell) had a
photoshoot in 30 minutes and he looked absolutely terrible! So he decided to jump into the Ocean with full force and guess what... it was freezing but he dived soo deep that he couldn’t get up due to Hypothermia but since he was a God he couldn’t drown Or freeze and he’s still alive, somewhere, in the Sea. So when you see a wave that’s him gasping for air... That was quite disturbing...Click HERE for the document and all the others + work in progress
Hi! Adam,
ReplyDeleteWhat you have written here is more of a story outline than a story. For a proper story it needs more characterisation development. descriptive language, and generally extended so it has more content. It also needs a structure - Introduction at the beginning, the body where a problem or dilemma is introduced, and a conclusion, all indicated by paragraphs.
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Hi! Adam,
ReplyDeleteWhat you have written here is more of a story outline than a story. For a proper story it needs more characterisation development. descriptive language, and generally extended so it has more content. It also needs a structure - Introduction at the beginning, the body where a problem or dilemma is introduced, and a conclusion, all indicated by paragraphs.
See me and ask for a workshop if you need more help or information.